Fling me back in oblivion
where I could paint you
with naked desires,
no eyes on them
Where you would smell
the fragrance on you
and know I have
stroked my brush again
and changed something
tiny, and impossible
for you to find
but never letting you be
the same
I would shroud a shade of you
with purple
and love you until
I wouldn't remember
what you really are beneath
Thats when I would start over
bottom up
to reshape, refactor,rearrange,
my reasons of loving you
Linked to One Stop Poetry. Visit them to read other poetry and also Shay's brilliant opinion on what makes good free verse.
Linked to One Stop Poetry. Visit them to read other poetry and also Shay's brilliant opinion on what makes good free verse.
13 comments:
beautiful...
Beautiful poem!
Tulika,
Read 3 pending posts. Good work always needs to be given due recognition. You deserve it. One who has a creative eye will always strive to do more and more. It is what art love within us demands. What a sweet way to express love! Well composed.
Take care
Now this one I must say, a really beautiful piece of work . I can see your desire dancing in every word that you picked from a wilderness of night blindedness . I grab that emotion however you reshape , rearrange.I simply love it .
Lovely poem! I enjoyed it very much. Thank you.
naked with no eyes on them, love that play...and enjoyed the whole thing,nice flow...
A fresh look at a love poem caught between image and words, turned around in space and admired in all angles. Well done. Gay
Sensual purpose to the poem
Where I could paint you with naked desires....the words are so simple, and they say so much. This is a beautiful piece. thanks
This is excellent imagery and a nice antidote to my day. Thanks for sharing!
I love your poem! I've been craving some poetry. :)
a very beautiful piece of art ...
Undiluted thought and feeling...just beautiful!
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